Wednesday, September 15, 2010
Im Thinking About You.
Im thinking about you like thugs think bout the hood. Like woodpeckers think about wood. Like fat kids think about cake that taste good. Im thinking about you like trains think about tracks. Like concrete thinks about cracks. Like children think about snacks. Im thinking about you like moms think about babies. Like Hercules thinks about Haties. Like men think about ladies. Im thinking about you like fish think about water. Like the sun thinks about getting hotter. Like a son thinks about becoming his father. Im thinking about you like mice think about cheese. Like dogs think about fleas. Like vegitarians think about peas. Im thinking about you like a speedo thinks about the pool. Like the nerds and losers think about ways to get cool. Like a toolbox thinks about a tool. Im thinking about you like everyday. Im thinking about you in every single way. Im thinking about you and im not afraid to say.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
I like how everything ryhmes. good job!
ReplyDeleteIt was probably one of the best ones on here. It flowed well and you had some really good ones.
ReplyDeleteThere were some really good lines. "Like a son thinks about becoming his father" - "Like the nerds and losers think about ways to get cool" -
ReplyDeleteMy suggestion would be to avoid becoming too predictable with the rhyming. Every rhyme comes in threes. I think it's more effective to rhyme some of the time, but not all of the time. Because then you're forced to write lines like "vegetarians think about peas" which isn't very good and only seems to be here because it rhymes.